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2) My peers reminded me to not include my name, and also recommended I speak with more conviction.
3) I took their advice and dropped my name from the entire pitch, focusing solely on the product. I also tried to make the introduction jump more and appeal to consumers' emotions. I also tried to differentiation my product/company from competition by making it more about the mission than just the product.
Hello Steven,
ReplyDeleteGreat job again! You had it memorized and seemed so comfortable. Plus your opening statement was also a great improvement. I like that you changed the pitch to focus more on the mission side. That doesn't work for every product but for yours it fit perfectly.
Steven,
ReplyDeleteGreat job on this pitch! I can definitely tell that you practiced before recording by the way you improved your body language. The small hand gestures that you added really improved the overall pitch. You seemed more comfortable in front of the camera this time and your message emphasized the important parts from your product that an investor would want to hear.
Hey Steven,
ReplyDeleteYou did so well on this elevator pitch! I can definitely tell you have become a lot more comfortable in front of the camera and talking about your product. It's really great that you are so focused on the mission behind your product because in my mind, that is why people are going to pick your products over others that are out there now.